On 30 Sep 2009, at 18:06, julie maxwell allen wrote:
Honest opinions please.
There’s an unnecessary comma in “Grassroots Communications, is located
in Hamburg, NY.”
On the ‘Newsletters’ page it says: “There are 2 forms of newsletters
that we offer.” This just looks lazy; you have plenty of room to write
the word ‘two’ instead of using the numeral.
One the same page: “Paper newsletter: THis is also great …” Wrong
capitalisation on the ‘h’ of ‘this’.
Brochures page: “In addition, brochures at your business so that
people can have portable information they can take home and read.”
That isn’t a sentence.
Brochures Page: the link to one of the brochures below extends way up
the page; you can inadvertently click on it right up near the text.
Photography page: no photographs. Bad move!
Logos page: text is justified and looks gappy as a result. Also
doesn’t match the other pages where text is aligned left.
Marketing plans page: “Marketing plans are the second most important
thing to have to have a successful business.” is a very odd sentence
indeed. As is “There are many different ways to do marketing for a
business.”
The rollovers at the bottom of the page seem a bit pointless as there
is plenty of room on the page to have all the contents visible
permanently.
Social Marketing page: it says "Social Marketing is defined as: The
planning and implementation of programs designed to bring about social
change using concepts from commercial marketing
There is a full-stop lacking at the end and, if you’re quoting
something, it would look much better if you said:
"Social Marketing is defined as: ‘The planning and implementation of
programs designed to bring about social change using concepts from
commercial marketing’.
In other news:
The words ‘Grassroots Communications’ in the header are spaced well
apart; they’d look better closer together.
In the slogan beneath, ‘where we bring your communications pieces
together’, the words ‘Pieces’ and ‘Together’ should not have capital
letters.
There’s a lot of space generally between items which I feel could be
tightened up a lot; the site also extends well below the browser
bottom with no content in that part, so you lose the bottom of the
green box.
After a while, the drop-down menus on the right start to work
erratically. I wonder why they’re necessary as, like the rollovers on
the Marketing Plans page, there is plenty of room on the page to have
all the menu items showing permanently.
best wishes,
Paul Bradforth
http://www.paulbradforth.com
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